1 Dec ’14
I have a revised draft in the works right now. I am having trouble trying to make my paper sound more like a lawyer and less like a detective. Hearing feedback from Kelly and Shelby really helped me see what my paper lacked. However It’s actually difficult to find areas where I could revise my paper to do sound more argumentative. I completely reworked my introduction but I still need to rework m lit review and main body and conclusion. I hope spending the rest of this week on the paper, i’ll be able to accomplish what I want out of it.