My draft is going well so far. I have completed a start to finish version of a draft and am still working on fine tuning it. Katie was my peer review partner and she was very helpful in giving me both positive feedback and constructive criticism. I would still like to add more detail about where Push stands right now with the public park plans and would like to reference the official document that they emailed me somewhere in the paper. I realize that I do not use an extensive amount of sources in my paper but that is because I can write much of this without. I feel like I have used appropriate case examples and have given well-rounded accounts of skateboarders. I could maybe add in some words by a government official in either support of building a skate park or in denial, or both, to give a more well-rounded argument here.
20 Nov ’14
Draft Progress – Eli
My draft is going well so far. I have completed a start to finish version of a draft and am still working on fine tuning it. Katie was my peer review partner and she was very helpful in giving me both positive feedback and constructive criticism. I would still like to add more detail about where Push stands right now with the public park plans and would like to reference the official document that they emailed me somewhere in the paper. I realize that I do not use an extensive amount of sources in my paper but that is because I can write much of this without. I feel like I have used appropriate case examples and have given well-rounded accounts of skateboarders. I could maybe add in some words by a government official in either support of building a skate park or in denial, or both, to give a more well-rounded argument here.
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